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[End is the Beginning]

Pretty badass!

Great visuals and overall, well done!

My only complaint, and has been my complaint with EVERY flash music video, is the footage for the chorus is more-or-less the same each time the chorus plays (I'm aware of how each are different from one another...that's why it's "more-or-less")...I always thought to myself how much more impressive that, even as the song progresses and takes you new places, it KEEPS taking you new places in familiar parts of the song....

...but then again, I listen to a lot of Prog-rock. lol...

I thought you did a great job! Never stop animating, because with time, you'll only get better and better, pulling off even more complex visuals.

...like the spinning, 3/4th's shadowed globe...that LOOKED GREAT, and I have no idea how you did that...

Voted Five.

[Death's Shadow 1]

I'm having difficulty believing this is your first

...because it's pretty damn good.

-There are a few minor spelling errors you should check up on. (Off the top of my head, I knew there was "longe" instead of "longer" , but there might be others.)
-There were also a few minor inconsistencies with the character designs. When the black guy first went down, he had that photorealism to him like the other faces did, but from then on he was vector drawn. Although the photorealism added to the gritty details, and only complimented the rest of the flash's very "Noir" feel, I would try to keep designs consistent throughout in the future.
-The green font...it's not that I outright have a problem with it, but there's just something I don't like about the look of the fonts. Possibly because that shade of green didn't mesh well with the background, or maybe it's just the design of the font...I would switch it up in that area.

Other than that, though, it was very interesting. Like I said, it had a really nice "noir" grit to it. The garbled voices were a little odd, but unique to the flash's credit. If you were to build on this, I'd love to see how deep you could make the story arch in this red-sun, bleak world of lawlessness.

In other words, keep up the good work! You'll only get better from here on out by doing more and more! Keep pumping out flashes for the experience of becoming more comfortable with animating, and challenge yourself by focusing on animation techniques you're not particularly good at.

Once you attack your weaknesses in animation, you'll quickly become a power-house, because if this REALLY IS your first flash, that's pretty incredible.

jabasil27 responds:

Haha, damn, I did miss that one letter. Thank you for the feedback though, it definitely gave me more direction. Thanks to all.

[Two Strange]

Heh

Not bad stop-motion, actually...it seemed to go really smoothly, and if you keep it up, you can be an absolute master at this kind of stuff.

What crippled the flash's score, though, is the audio of the characters were WAAAAY too soft...even if they are mumbling gibberish, I want to hear it, because it's a method of the character's to display emotion, or human reactions to what's going on...so when I turn it up, THE MUSIC IS BLASTING!

It's like, say the audio for the voices are at 5...the music is at 15 or some shit...balance them, don't make the audio disproportionate.

Also, it's on a loop. I'd highly recommend throwing a preloader on there at the very least; just use one of the available ones in the download section, and there ya go. I STILL don't know how to make a replay button, but as long as you have a preloader with a play-button in the beginning, that's really all you need.

Great fun, though. Keep up the good work!

Flapjak responds:

Yeah I know what you mean. The problem with the sound was to do with the mic which was really soft at pick up. I have a new one now it's all good. Thanks for the review

[Madness: Rising]

Wow...That's intense.

Nobody has anything on you in the side-scrolling fighting department...that shit was WICKED! I loved the creative license you took on the textures and design of the cross-heads, and the Clown straight up looked evil, almost H.R. Geiger-y.

But, unlike your past side-scrolling brawls, you never once had a clear look at them. Sure, it's supposed to be frantic, and chaotic, rapid-paced and everything, but it rarely ever stood still.

The red trailing effect was very interesting, and I liked how you incorporated the destructible environments.

My only problem was rendering the shell still attached to the slug in the 3D rendered bullet in midair. The shell would've been ejected out the side of the gun, and all you would have seen in the air was the soft-cone shaped slug...

...unless, I guess you could say, it was a special gun the shot unexploded ordinance...that would be fine. :P

Great to see you back! Don't get discouraged if you had higher expectations for this flash; it was still incredibly well done, and animated skillfully.

Happy Late-Madness Day! Voted 5.

[M.O.T.O.R]

Absolutely Badass

-The music was awesome.
-Blew my mind for a Madness flash.
-The action was really well done, as well. My favorite being the suspended lightsaber above the trooper, and being force pulled through it.

I also dug the hell out of using the grounded starships cannons before he got out in the hallway

But what completely blew my mind was how you incorporated 3D into it...the lighting and the dynamic camera angles were brilliant.

I have to ask, since I'm taking basic 3D rendering with Maya every Thursday at college, how did you manage to import the 3D animation into flash?

Like, what all did you have to do?

The only constructive criticism I can provide is the action could have been more rapid. I'm looking forward to your response!

Voted 5!

DutchinLive responds:

I did maya in my digital media course, and it makes my brain hurt, but I wouldn't mind learning it again. Swift 3d is basically a 3d flash engine, same system as Maya, no NURBS, all polygons. It has an exporting feature which makes your rendered scene a .swft which gets imported into flash on 3 layers (depending on settings), object, highlights and shading or something.

So it basically comes in as a frame by frame movie clip in flash, ready for you to screw with it how you wish.

PM me if you want.

[DBZ: "Saiyan's Paradise"]

LMAO!

I lol'd at a bunch of the lyrics in here man...I agree with everyone else, in that it needed to be colored and animated, but this song kicked ass!

Might I suggest uploading the song to the Audio Portal? I'd throw it on my Zune in a heartbeat.

Great job! I loved how the artwork paralleled with the original "Gangster's Paradise" video...all the more reason why it would've looked even better animated and colored!

But when it all comes down to it, I was thoroughly entertained. Voted five!

[40k Collab Trailer]

Woot! Saw my Headshot!

Can't wait for this to be out guys! I haven't seen everyone else's contributions, and so far, it looks great!

Great work, Bomblu!

[Girlchan in Paradise Ep2]

lmao

"No Yusuke, don't do it!"
"...What, why not?"

I was laughing my ass off through just about all of it. Bravo to everyone involved! I can't wait to see what other anime cliche's will get brutalized in Episode 3.

...Giant Robots? Just sayin'....

Great job!

[XCOM Series Trailer]

Nice.

The only advice I got for you is to never stop animating; like any art, you become even better with practice...so that should clear up any doubts you have for yourself in your drawing ability.

Onto the criticism:

(Pros +, Cons -)

+The music was epic and well chosen!
(Not a con, but I would suggest finding an abundance of sound effects NOW for future projects...audio other than just the music is encouraged. Even in some music videos they'll add other sounds or voice-tracks to match what's going on in the video.)
+You have a keen attention to detail, and the character designs were proportional!
-Cheesy anime elements killed the mood in certain scenes. Generic Crew Member #5 studies his screen with the calm eye-darting of a gamer, and although he's reacting to bad news coming up on the readings, literally shivers like he just shat his pants, and spins around, maw agape like he's either shrieking like a monkey, or ready to inhale a grapefruit.

...What did he see on the screen to make him react in such a way? Obviously the audience isn't supposed to know to provide a hook, but whatever it is, with a mouth open in such a way like that, it's not like he's going "Commander! Independence Day is happening at the Church!" or not even so much as an open-closed-open, "OH SHI-" ...he just see's the screen, shakes like Michael J. Fox, and turns to apparently scream at the top of his lungs.

"AAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!"
"Oh for the love of- WHAT THE HELL IS IT, Generic Crew Member #5!?"
"...There's some aliens attacking on the screen...they're big, and they're probably going to beam down a couple of their troops to start cappin' civilians."
"There...wasn't that easier than just screaming at us all?"
"I get excited!"

-It's not a huge con, but I'd recommend not outlining fluids and liquids in black. Say if it's gushing blood, outline it in a darker shade of red...Light blue tears? Outline it in slightly darker or slightly lighter blue. White beam? Some hue of gray. Y'know what I mean?

-Also there was a scene in there when Captain Cowlick saved the girl, tumbling out of the way of an oncoming death beam. While the alien promptly refuses to keep shooting at them a little to the left, we see the Captain LIFT HER THE FUCK OFF OF HER like she was nothing to check to see if she's okay.

I understood what was going on...he saves her, and he wants to look her right in the eye, and check to see if she's safe. But a slight lift, where gravity still comes into play would be sufficient...He grabs her by the shoulders, does what I would liken to an upside-down pushup, and LIFTS HER parallel to him like she weighed lighter than Styrofoam.

...Hey, you asked for reviews, you got 'em. I still enjoyed the flash. And for your second ever, it's REALLY DAMN GOOD.

To gain complexity in future animations, be sure that if the buildings are shaded, shade the trees and street lights too to give it that added detail. When the scene is on the face, have the eyelids narrow and widen accordingly with face as it studies the screen...Like, seriously, just watch different people's faces and notice subtle movements in the eyebrows, eyelids, cheeks, lips, and especially head-position...if you can master realistic body movements at an early age, you'll jump so high in your animation ability, your nose would bleed.

Again, I can't stress this enough, keep doing what you do. Just keep it at a steady pace of outdoing yourself constantly...

...So this flash was better than your last one...your NEXT one should be better than this!

P4D3LL05 responds:

You can't imagine how much fun i had reading your review, especially with generic crew member #5.Literally i rolled on the floor laughing.
You cannot be more true about all the things you mentioned.
Thank you for your priceless review and i'll try to implement all the information you
gave me.

P.S. i loved the Dick Neck trailer :)