Galneda's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Making a music video for my song honey]

You can barely hear the song, the video quality is low, and this is a pretty bare-bones work in progress.

This character is still in a very skeletal, sketched out level of quality. Their character design hasn't been nailed yet, and you're still figuring out the movements. It seems that your pre-production process is still all over the place.

There was maybe one or three frames of this character that seemed fully inked out, and then it devolved into mannequins with balljoints as they moved, choppily, from a medium shot to a full shot. It ends with a very flat fullshot of this character with someone else, with zero environmental cues. Like, no temp backgrounds, no semblance of a stage, it's gonna need a lot more elbow grease to get this character to life.

I also don't understand the "M" rating? There was nothing here to hint at that? Unless it's lyrical content, which I can't understand, because it's so muffled and off in the background.

But, to bring it back to my initial point, I advise from a vantage point of experience when I suggest "don't upload works in progress" because, even if people are brutal dirtbags that shit all over it, that's discouraging, but also if people beam and praise you about what you've done so far, you're gonna get that endorphin kick way too early, and you're gonna get burned out before you finish this.

Then it's gonna eat away at you as weeks turn into months turn into years, while you feel like a failure because you haven't finished that music video you wanted to do.

I've been there, and it sucks.

So, succeed in privacy. Experiment privately, and get that endorphin kick showing off what you've been working hard on, when it's something REALLY special to show off. Your first FINISHED music video! That'd be a big deal! Upload that! And preferably as an export, and not a recording on your phone. Keep up the good work, do some research about animation pipelines so you can get your build order straight, and this thing's gonna look great when it's ready to view!

Erynchan responds:

I know i just eanted to share some of my progress to hype myself up

[Dumb - BOOM!!!!]

Why is there a thumbnail window in the bottom-right corner playing what's already on the screen?

LuisLet responds:

because I didn't know how to cover the watermark HAHAHAHAHA

[My first animation :D]

Seems unfinished, but what you have here is incredible for a first animation. It establishes a good understanding of character acting, you had complex SFX moments in here too, and I think you're off to a great start!

I would advise you start researching into your next step in advancing your skillsets. Acquiring an animation software that allows for more complex visual and audio capabilities. This is great for a start- now, go further!

AlfaFoxxo responds:

Спасибки!)

[The Road to Eldorado Reanimated Entry]

This came out great! Super dramatic angles, I love the mouth shapes you gave Tzekel Kan. The comedic timing on the hand slap was perfect.

If you ever need more voices for one of your projects, hit me up! I had a blast voicing Tzekel in this, and I'm certain we can make something cool together! Congrats on the Daily 1st!

Orbitten responds:

Thanks. I'll keep it in mind.

[Rascal Rabbit & Benny the Bear]

Corey fucking knocked it outta the park with this voice acting.

Both of these character designs were extremely fun, and I was enamored with the attention to detail on their texturing- from the fur of the rabbit's arms, to the texture of the bear's tongue, and even subtle things like the veins in the bear's bulging eyes. The brain looked great, blood and sweat (and tears) carried the joke really well.

Only critique would be on comedic timing- some shots could've been tightened up a little quicker, but that's purely a creative choice. It's most evident, as it becomes clear that it's not the cookie he's interested in to get that wham, bam, boom, punchline payoff.

It's clear that this is a cartoon presented for kids, (after all, that's who Corey was talking to), the only thing that I think could've punched up the gag is if we got a reaction-shot to what the bunny was looking at. Be it a camera crew of critters / humans in awe at this spectacle of blood, or if it was shot in front of a live-studio audience. Even a misdirect, where the audience is full of bears and they applaud. Turns out this is what bears watch for entertainment!

But like you said, this dang thing took a month, I'm just adding weeks and weeks of work here- this thing is perfectly strong on its own legs. The team did a splendid job, and you all should be proud of that Daily 1st Award! I'll be keeping an eye out for this come Monthly Voting Time!

VoicesByCorey responds:

Thank you for all the kind words, and feedback, Geoff! Indigo has a bright future ahead of them!

[Grimace Tries the Shake!]

You got a great style established so far, with the yellow backgrounds, crisp lip-syncing and decent composition.

A bit of a subversion of expectations on the theme of "The Grimace Shake" meme, and that probably contributed to the overall score. Typically, if people are surfing the tags of Grimace Shake, they could probably expect that horror-themed twist that the shake itself is killing or possessing or transforming people supernaturally.

But here he's just kinda like "Fuck you kid" and that's the punchline. It's just kinda like a whatever gag, like "He's rude, he hates kids, what a dick" and the people that were after that horror stinger or violent theme may have felt misled, and voted averagely. Because all of this isn't bad, and it's evident that there was effort and thought carried out to the short (even if it was only made in a few hours) but it feels anticlimactic and therefore kinda forgettable.

Lip-syncing drops off the face of the earth after the kid's offended, and it just switches between two stills, which indicates that you might've been in a hurry to knock this out real quick before you didn't care about the short anymore (believe me, I get it). So, another contributing factor to the average score could've also been because the ending half didn't have the same polish or detail that it started with. Something else to look out for moving forward as you make your next animation.

RedTariq responds:

Thanks for the tip! This isn't really what I meant when I asked why my stuff got rated so low, considering this animation was more making fun of the tired "someone drinks the Grimace Shake and dies" trend with the anti climatic joke being intentional since it's out of nowhere and I just rushed it so my YouTube channel wouldn't die out so fast.

This isn't my best work, and I understand people don't like my other videos that much either since they're pretty flawed. But I was surprised the results were so mixed because on a website like YouTube, there isn't really a ratings system anymore, so a lot of feedback was overly positive. So for a platform like Newgrounds which basically is all about animation, the mixed reception surprised me.

I also rushed this one because I'm already working on two much more polished animations, taking feedback from others who felt the meme sound effects were too excessive or that the animations were not cohesive enough and applying it there. One is almost a full minute (with actual backgrounds and full animation) and the other is for a part of a collab that is due in September (which is about 20 seconds).

I promise you these videos won't feel as corporate or rushed since I now have more experience with how to make animated comedy work more than just "funny noises and goofy faces!"

[The Siren - Animatic]

She's got a really cute design! I make animatics for a living and one thing I could suggest is having a shot-counter in the top left corner to make it a little more streamlined when you're getting notes. They could still use the time-stamp, sure, but that's just how I've always been taught how to do it- no real right-or-wrong there.

As they say, "as long as it reads" she and the fish look very polished, barely anything is rough about this, so I hope that's not consuming a lot of your time. If not, groovy, but if you're under a time-crunch, don't feel an aversion to get loose with it.

You're dealing with some shots that go back and forth between submerged and looking down on the surface of the water from above- there could be a color choice or visual that could indicate that just a little more clearly.

Anything else that didn't read to the eye immediately, clarified itself later, so I can't gripe on any individual detail- the whole short was fun, everything read well, I'm confident this is gonna look great in final.

Keenobishinobi responds:

Thank you so much for the feedback :)

[I do animation on YouTube, go subscribe if you want, this one is my latest work 😊👍]

I think you accidentally put all of the information that was supposed to be in the author description in the title. Which is too long to read, and thus, leaves this animation nameless.

Looking at your profile, you only have one other submission, and it's the same art you use for your avatar and header. It doesn't stylistically match the skill level of what's shown in this animation. So it got me suspicious if this is even yours.

I found a YouTube channel here

https://www.youtube.com/@t-artzstudios5819

And this same submission was uploaded there 11 days ago. Odd that you opted to lead your Newgrounds account with that particular submission and not your newest or your oldest. Could you explain why?

TartzX responds:

I’m sorry I’m really new to newgrounds, I just want to clarify that this is my work, I post animations on YouTube and some art on other platforms, again I’m very new to this so I apologize,
I hope I made some things clear

[The Mangolodeon]

"WELL IF IT ISN'T THE MANGO"

"I need more clinky clinkies made out of bestgar to save baby gogo"

"BUT YOU TOOK OFF YOUR HELMET IN FRONT OF SOMEONE, GOODBYE"

"This is that way"

"THIS IS A WAY"

ExtraLongLunch responds:

Now go bathe in the land of the living water...for then- you will be absolved of your sin.

That is the only way...

[Aisle 99]

This is amazing! Exceptionally well-done; I'm familiar with ToonBoom Harmony, and you've pulled off some really impressive stuff with the programs at your disposal. Extremely recognizable talent, and I'm invested to see where this is gonna go.

If you ever need a male voice actor, throw my hat into the pool; I just ask for my name to be spelled right. Been working professionally with Cyanide & Happiness more than half a decade.

Aisle99 responds:

An ΩΜ representative will be in contact with the next appropriate opening.