Galneda's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Cyberspace Pirates]

Greenlight this IP right the fuck now! I want more! I wanna see where this goes!

FunPix responds:

Thanks, I'm pushing to continue the story :)

[CYDONIA | teaser]

This isn't really a pilot, it's more of a teaser. Plus, you didn't provide any links or information for people to learn more about what this is. All you've said, as I write this, is "We're looking for fundings to make it"

...To make a movie? To make a short like Tales of Alethrion? To make a music video? To make a series? To make a game? You need to make this clear to your audience, and provide them with information that'll help you and your team's goals.

What's here looks splendid as it is, and it's enough to interest me. I think it'll be enough to get some people to dig a little further for information, but you need to help us out here and network your product.

Don't tell me, tell everyone. It should be right there in the Author's Comments, in between my review and the video itself.

MartinFelice responds:

It´s a pilot/teaser, because the production hasn´t begun, so yeah, tecnically it´s a teaser, but is playing the role of a pilot.
You can help with fundings here:
https://www.patreon.com/MartinFelice
But we´re currently looking for fundings on other places too.
And it´s a short, like any short animation that you can watch in an animation festival.
Thanks for your comment :D

[Rain]

Needs sound effects. This was a skilled practice at frame-by-frame animation and onion skins are clearly your friend. That's great! With a little more practice, it can look a little less wobbly. The framing and composition is inconsistent. Sometimes the cloud character is hugging the edge of the screen, and it's just framed kinda weird. I suggest looking into "The rule of thirds" and try to keep that in mind as you focus the camera on what you mean to be focusing on.

Great start! Keep at it!

[RAINBOWS!]

There are more links to your range of social media in the author's comments than there is content.

50% of the short is introduction.

The meat of the short is completely mute- no sound effects, no environmental ambiance. The bulk of the animation is taking a graphic and stretching it, be it a creature breathing or the "poking" motion. When the action takes place and it cuts to the reaction shot, it happens so quickly and ends so abruptly it doesn't give the audience much room to register what just happened.

The colors are nice, even if the character design is a little too cluttered and busy. I think you need to challenge yourself more as an animator to grow and learn to be more comfortable with techniques that make actions easier to read. I would also try to pay attention to the pacing of things you like to watch to learn a sense of timing, both comedic and dramatic pacing. Getting informed on when to linger on a shot, the beats between actions, and when to cut to a transition can only benefit you and strengthen you as an animator.

I recommend reading Richard Williams "Animator's Survival Kit." That pill of knowledge helped me mature as an artist and animator exponentially, and if you study it and practice the motions he teaches in that book (or DVD, video), you will level wayyyy up.

FoxMew4044 responds:

Look I'm studying as an animator and don't get me wrong I would love to get my hands on the book or the DVD but unfortunately I just can't afford it right now.

[Dojo Duel#0 - Core vs Carina]

She should win, and then immediately foreshadow limitations, similar to how he has visualized limitations, with his legs not quite working right. She needs something that equalizes it out, but differently.

[unfinished : untitled (soon to be finished, soon to be named)]

Better than my first flash, that's for sure. The name of this submission reflexively made me ready to blam this thing to smithereens, but there's a lot of demonstrated skill in this thing. I can't wait to see how you shape up with more practice.

studioSTRICKEN responds:

Thank you very much. I'm new to all this and these are the first nice words I have received on this website, with the exception of my dad and aunt. I hope to create short animations with some sort of narratives in them, but here I decided to create an animation with flashy cuts and crap. this is no way near the end product, I'm hoping to make it at least a minute, it really is taking time though. Never the less, don't let it be said that I am not a man of my word, I'm on that animation, especially with that boost of confidence you have given me.

[Travelling Deity - Full episode]

You are a continued inspiration and Tales of Alethrion is an incredible masterpiece of a series. I wish you and your team all of the best of luck and fortunes to make the best possible art, and may it skyrocket you into making even more incredible productions for years to come. Y'all are the real deal, and I love you with all my heart. These are amazing, and thank you for sharing it with us.

[Snails Don’t Meow]

Export setting / aspect ration mishap hurt this thing's score for me, but so did the audio balancing quality.

Generally characters are talking very low volumed, so it makes me turn up my speakers, and then they shout to even higher threshold's, which makes me turn it down, and then they're speaking low again- that's extremely annoying on its own, so, ignoring that this thing's been squished till it's a vertical tower of a cartoon, and even putting the sound issues aside, this could have been a sufficient standalone Spongebob Gag. But whoever edited the audio or exported the animation needs to learn from this.

Proof-watch your uploads in the future, listen for the balancing by turning down things that are too loud and turning up things that are too quiet, and you'll be golden.

foneycone responds:

Hello! Sorry about the aspect ratio, tried uploading the same file from my iPhone but clearly it messed with the aspect ratio and even some audio. Thanks for letting me know and giving some helpful criticism!

[rayman vs bunny]

The audio balancing is extremely harsh. I think if anything hurt its score, it's because of how unnecessarily loud the Rabbid scream is. You need to balance your audio so it isn't too quiet and it isn't too loud...a nice, comfortable, and consistent volume would really help out your future productions.

That said, I love the hell out of the time and patience that went through doing this as a stop-motion. That's no small feat at all! Watch that audio in the future, but keep growing as an animator- you demonstrated a lot of skill in this one!