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[First draft]

The title's too long, and it gets cutoff by the site's own header. The only way I'm able to read it is because it's spelled out in the web-address of this submission... that, and you reiterated it where it was supposed to be in the Author's Comments. A better title for this would've been "Experiment and Hurt rough draft" or "prototype" or "pitch cards v1" or "early concepts"

There's some grammatical errors here or there that were missed.
"An experiment got wrong" would be stronger as "She was a subject of an experiment that went wrong", and the last two have a fullblown sentence that starts with "Escape their gruesome fate" when it would've been more complete as "They escaped their gruesome fate"

If this is people's first impressions of these characters, the Danger Level doesn't mean anything to your audience yet. It takes up a third of their card, and they're all just kinda...greater than midway but not fully a danger, so what's the point of that statistic? If this is meant to illuminate a part of their personality, show us.

If this is an animation or a webcomic or something that's visual, it relies on art: "Show, don't Tell."

Always consider when writing something visual, "Show, don't tell."

So don't be concerned about over-explaining. Be concerned if it reads immediately what you're trying to say about the character, world, or situation.

There's nothing worse for a story than for an audience member to be told that a character is good instead of showing them that the character is good.

We'll believe a character is bad when we're shown a character doing bad things.

Therefore, because first impressions are important, occupy the space of your splash card about your characters with something valuable. Like, depict your characters in their natural states and different emotional extremes.

For example: You already have them all in a full shot to the left. How about two or three medium-shots of them doing what they do best. This one's clumsy, so they're looking embarrassed and apologetic. This one's a hothead, so they're looking irritated or they're in the middle of crashing out. This one's sensitive, so they're bonding with delicate animals or vibing somewhere calm.

The danger level doesn't show us anything. And you seem to be aware of that by feeling the need to establish in parenthesis, right beneath it "(Red=Mad) ...Okay? If it were a strong and informative graphic, it wouldn't require clarification.

ERTAKOI responds:

Thx so much I do appreciate the commentary but That grammar was on purpose it would be really boring if I started formerly, I did not include that personalities yet as their personalities can be to complex or I haven't figured out it yet, I was not really paying attention to the title because I post on multiple apps, the biography is inspired by Terrible Mouse biography and I will include it in the story when I have the motivation to do animation (I know the show and don't tell stories telling method) and the danger level was inspired by another biography (Pls don't leave criticism if the artist doesn't directly stated(Correct me if I am wrong because I'm new to newgrounds)

(In short the biographies were inspired heavily Terrible Mouse (which is another series by another creator Gutiannn on (YouTube)) and another biography (Which is a Murder Drones OC Biography) and by the way I know how to introduce characters it's just that I don't want to draw or anime a whole introduction video and lastly don't criticize and artists if they did not directly (Correct me if I am wrong because I'm new to newgrounds))

["You've got me in a CHOKEHOLD"]

Aw you could've tagged Sleep Token up there in your tags!

I really dig this. It's kinda got a Venom Symbiote vibe to it, and it's the most different thing you've done recently at a glance. I think you're cooking with something here. With the liquid reflectivity, the shine, the tendrils of the goop. You should totally experiment with that. Get some real goop going! The heavy heavy shading in the background lends to the bitcrushed style you got here, just it eliminates a lot of depth.

Those mountains are just as bright as those totem poles, right? Clearly those mountains are really far away. Well, have you looked at a mountain in the distance? In daytime, they're brighter than anything in the foreground, because of how much air is in between us and the object, light gets diluted by the density of the air particles as it travels; coming from the sun, bouncing off the rocks and ice caps, before finally being captured by our eyes.

At night? You're not gonna see the mountain, it'll be too dark. But if you insist, for composition's sake, that the lightsource that exists in this art piece is powerful enough to illuminate a distant, giant mountain over the horizon, well, at least shade it. Otherwise, that rockface appears to be just as close as the totem poles in the middle ground. It's difficult to tell if those are further away from the hill or if they're embedded in the same grassy plains. So clarify it for your viewer with shadow placements, grass BEHIND the totem poles, more environmental context, and a broader range in your color pallet.

Sprunkzy responds:

Thanks so much for looking through my drawings after i made that forum posts, i genuinely really appreciate that you're taking the time to review one of my drawings as you definitely seem knowledgeable on art more than me lol

I will definitely try to cook with more liquids and goop like textures in the future, i think i dig how i do them as well

I know that mountains work like that, but this was based off a creepy Sonic rom hack that has weird graphics (bit-crushed and highly saturated with a limited color palette) in which the mountains of the back are still seen even through the filter. I do admit tho i did mess up the composition of them in the final piece and i should have shaded and added more details, so i'm glad you're giving me advice on that, i will take these into consideration.

Also yeah the lyrics are a Sleep Token reference, glad you caught onto that actually lol

Thanks once again for this review man, it's really appreciated!

[Lady Death - Savage Reign #1 Cover]

Frazetta would be proud.

I love the ferocity of her face, the motion in this, anatomy, grit- Everything about this absolutely rocks.

Gonna have to keep an eye on you, because you're going up, up, UP in the world! Keep kicking ass! AND Taking names!

PkBlitz responds:

Omg thank you so so much!! I put so much effort into this one, so thank you for the kind words <3 (PS feel free to look me up on other socials too if you haven't already!)

[Lady Death - Death Conjuror Covers]

Holy shit, my brother used to read Lady Death comics. What an incredible opportunity, and well-deserved! You do her justice! Keep kicking ass and taking names!

PkBlitz responds:

Thank you so much for the kind words!! More covers are coming <3

[The Ironman (COLORED)]

This looks like it was inked on hand onto tangible paper, but I see nothing that gives away the coloring process.

What was the process behind making this piece from the ground up? How much of it is digital, and how much is it physical, because at the moment, it looks like legit comic book illustration.

Discovered your entire profile with that badass flamejob F-15 getting featured on the front page, and I've just been in awe looking at the rest of your portfolio. Had to stop and say something out of curiosity on this one.

Dafteeeer responds:

I'm glad you've liked my work! Thank you!!

Everything I draw or do about art is completely hand-drawn/made. I draw this one (as well as all my drawings) from scratch. I used 0.5mm and 0.05mm sharpies and more sharpies to blackened it...

This colored version is just a copie of the original one (black&white), I just print it and color it with more sharpies ;)

And exactly thats my porpouse! To make it look as good as a legit comic book stuff

['WE CAN'T HELP HIM']

This made me realize, GenoSamuel's been taking a break for so long that I almost forgot about Chris Chan and what they're up to these days. Feels good to not be up to date anymore, but I checked out of curiosity.

According to the CWCkipedia, she's got a girlfriend now, apparently. Sightings are rare, but when people see her, she's with this super short girl who looks like a kid but is actually apparently in her 30's, and they're hanging out a lot. They aren't posting insane shit anymore, so I guess it's working.

Anyway, good for them- I hope they can live the rest of their lives in privacy.

Erebboi responds:

My theory is that she's wrangling him in whatever way, but hope that I'm wrong

[Get lost, Loser!]

Iconic rival, that I wish they did more with.

As a kid, right around when webcomics seemed to be at their peak, I had written a fancomic where Mega Man and Bass teamed up to stop an unhinged Dr. Wily plot, and it pretty much lead up to the cataclysm that kicked off events that started Mega Man X.

I was diving into everything Bass & Treble I could get my hands on, and I remember being so upset that there was so little content on him. He was just so cool to me. This art captures him and his robocanine perfectly.

A fun one to do would be their fusion, where he's black and purple with giant mech wings!

DreamsBellArt responds:

Thanks for the compliment!
And I totally agree, he didn't get enough of the spotlight or a complete story.
I did consider drawing his fusion as well! I will see if I have the energy to do so in the future maybe

[SIN ROOM!]

Quality! Outstanding detail, and I love the idea, lmao

DeathRayGraphics responds:

Thanks! I considered creating a whole comic book based on this.

[An Impeccable Sadness]

I resonate with this. I've been there, even at that age of 19. This piece of art is complete, because the incompletion is a part of this.

When I sketched stuff out like this, I would quickly delete it, because I gave power to what I thought people's impression of me would become my reputation.

My advice to you, as a 35 year old man, as a fellow neurotic artist that dips and dives in and out of depression- my advice as it pertains to this art piece, is never delete this submission.

You will grow as an artist, as a person, as a romantic, everything will change. This website will change. You may go away and return years later to rediscover this piece.

And you'll look upon it with wiser eyes. You'll look at this face that you've drawn with a soul that remembers exactly where you were when you drew it. You'll remember that spaghetti, and the environment you were in where you ate it. You'll remember the ceiling or wall that you stared at as you tried and failed to sleep.

And you'll smile. Because this is a marker that you can measure for your own growth. You'll smile because it got better.

That need for connection is human. It's only a matter of time that someone recognizes that you have a lot of love to give, and it'll click into place when Real Recognizes Real.

A newfound meaning to pick up, when I say goodbye by saying "Keep it real."

Keep creating. Step away and reset every once and a while, kick your feet by walking around the block.

And if you don't feel like doing that, and you wanna chat, my inbox is open at any time. Feel free to message me, man.

TheBestBroster responds:

Hey, I really appreciate your thoughtful comment. :)

And don't worry, I had no plans on deleting this. I want to share myself with the world genuinely as a human being, not just my highlight reel.

And I do like what you said about the possibility of looking at this years from now. I like the idea of being 30 or so, and coming back to look at this as a wiser, more mature person, and being thankful I did not give up.

You saying it is only a matter of time is also incredibly comforting to hear, thank you. :)

[Bari-Arm]

That's my kinda mech design! Hell yeah! Looking great!

DANMAKUMAN responds:

Thank you!